Oh yes, some kids want to be spoonfed: 'But what do you WANT me to write?'. It really takes a dedicated teaching culture to teach them to think for themselves, with inquiring, curious, risk taking minds, helping them understand that this kind of thinking DOES help them get the results they want.

I'm glad you got something out of it before you read the background - I initially explained it first, but I was hoping the poem would speak that itself. It's such good fun to get an original text and play with it - I know you do a great job with the haiku in this way. It's very satisfying to explore a genre in that way!