The First Trace.


Hello! @hive-161465, interesting proposal. I think the first time I stepped on snow in Ontario, Canada, back in the winter of 2010/11, lends itself to this prose-poetic exercise representative of Haibun, but I will fall short, as it will be the structure, since the sound, that Japanese song, will be impossible for me to convey.


The First Trace

I walked on snow for the first time, and nothing had prepared me for it. My boots didn't sink deeply or fill with mud like they did on earth; each step produced a dry, rhythmic crunch, as if I were breaking thin layers of glass beneath my soles. I stopped to look back and saw my footprints, and felt an immense stillness that seemed to contain the whole world in a deep Canadian silence.

Fresh, unbroken snow;
One step cracks the frozen crust,
Silence fills the air.


The full short film can be found on my YouTube channel.




I would like to invite my poet friend @silher to read his contribution, if time allows. Also thanks to @moeknows for visiting my post.


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This poem captures wonder in restraint. I admire how your first encounter with snow became a quiet revelation—sound, stillness, and footprint blending into a moment where the world pauses, breathes, and listens with you.

This is such a beautiful experience, cool enough to describe Haibun, the snow must be really happy to have you😂

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