Write like you speak.

So I took out my time to carefully write a summary of what my profile and service is about on LinkedIn today, and this is what i came up with :

Hi, I'm Jessica and I might be the first person in the world to professionally state that I sell time, and I do
this by writing carefully researched, precise and error free content that converts to sales, specifically for
you. Personally, I have researched and concluded that four major resources that lead success in a
business, and they consist of:

1. Time
2. A starving crowd
3. A product / service
4. A compelling story / content
   Fortunately, I'm able to provide you with only two out of these four, which are time and storytelling /
   content writing. Let me elaborate on these two:

TIME: The second most important thing after life itself is time. Time gives birth to alot of things, that is
why you hear alot of people say "time will tell", even the Bible said "there is time for everything"I'm
sure the Quran and other holy books also have something to say about time to.
Time = Work
Time = Travelling
Time = Spending time with family and friends
Time = Making more money

Unfortunately, you have just 24 hours in a day which is not enough to carry out all these activities, so
this where I come in. I have decided to sell a fraction of my time to you by helping you write finely researched, descriptive and compelling contents for your business that will triple your sales in a short
time, and my services include:
Emails
Newsletters
Advertising and promo
Social media captions
Headlines for already drafted copies
Blogs
Sales pages
Landing pages

The second important resource that I'm willing to offer is STORYTELLING.
Human tell stories everyday without even knowing it, that "gist" that you always want to tell a friend is a story, most times we work really hard because we want to be like someone that had a good life story or because we want to be able to tell people our stories. Social media is blowing hot these days because of
the stories that are being shared there, movies are acted stories, life itself is a story. Most times (80%), these stories make us express certain emotions such as sadness (sometimes we even cry), anger, happiness, satisfaction, pity and so on. A person's action can be influenced by the stories he or she is been told and that is why I consider it very important to inculcate stories into the services I provide because no one ever forgets a good story.
With these being said, if you have a starving crowd (people that are willing to buy your product) and a hot product / service, but you are finding it difficult to sell your product, send me a direct message or an email ezikejessica6@gmail.com

How did well did I write?