What an intense chapter in this captivating saga! This story keeps getting better and now we see the inevitable fall of an empire and defeat of a once-powerful king, no thanks to Gawdawfel.
I admire the SOBs clever strategy to draw Hartfelt from the citadel so the crown could be attacked from all sides. And that battle scene! The way you place the king's army at uneven odds is interesting. Who knew more help was on the way for the SOBs? The emergence of Colyn and his giant soldiers from the shoreline reminds me of a battle scene in the popular high fantasy TV series, House of the Dragon. It's a prequel to the famous Game Of Thrones.
You depict the battle scene with such brutality that I would expect nothing less of a fantasy story. The end is emotional - we see Alphonse's rage and thirst for revenge give way to pity as he considers the broken king on the ground. Did he hesitate because of their blood connection? I can't wait for the next chapter. Beautifully written!
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I always hoped that Lord Foucant would receive the help he called for when his guard rushed from the Great Hall while he listened to Gawdawfel. I also hoped Colyne would incorporate into the story well as a childhood friend, now a powerful sea captain. Hartfelt's army was scattered and tired from the other recent battles.
The meeting in the South for the SOB was not to engage them fully, but to lure them to the shoreline. It could only work if Hartfelt or Gawdawfel actually saw Alphonse and chased him. Alphonse should have been hung at the gallows. Turned out to be a good strategy for the SOB to use Alphonse as bait. But that was their plan from the start.
I've had this complete story in drafted sections since late last year deciding whether to freewrite or turn it into a more alien art hive project. I knew it was going to stretch over 10 chapters and would be a lot of work at 2K words or more each.
Only one chapter left to conclusion. Thanks for staying with the story. I'm glad you've enjoyed it thus far. I have watched both GOT and HOTD.
I don't think I'll attempt a saga such as this again soon, not after my 6-part Omnipotent Being In Female No. 2 - EUGENIA series last year. and now my 15-part Uprising.
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These sagas are definitely fun to read, but real challenge lies in the imagination and writing. I'm glad you chose to freewrite instead of alien art 'cause you might not cover as much details as you have. One more chapter to go! Well done! 😄
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