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RE: Toe Jam -5minutefreewrite

in Freewriters5 years ago

I really like your treatment of such a subject with realism and detail. Of course there is someone who refreshes the rations of toe jam. You really allow the reader to get in the head of the narrator by including them.

But not just that, your language is also refreshing. "Sock-wearing sleepers in a single apartment building to take care of." The sentence lilts beautifully.

Thanks for sharing your work.

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Thanks for reading it!