@meverse,
Happy belated birthday. I hope it was a great one, this was a strong solid original song, nice vibes and grooving and a soulful bounce, the lyrics are not too much, a light easiness to sing along to, I like the overall song structuring, and the transitions, I would say, next time use an instrumental without the beat producer tag in the background, there are plenty of free beats to use, even entire libraries of copyright free songs to use from websites, secondly I think you are still holding back on the song, I feel there is a portion where you really sing a bit more passionately and outburst of emotion which adds a climax portion of this other laid back kind of vibe, just a suggestion, and thirdly, when competing in a competition, don't be afraid to redo the entry one more time, especially with you knocking over something at the end of the video, everything counts, and the ending should always be clean and strong :) Hope that helps. Thanks for participating and sharing your gift of music