Hello Vibes Family,
It feels so great to back! I haven't been available because of my final exams but now I am back and almost a graduate!!!🤗🤗
This week I decided to step out of my comfort zone and do something I haven't done here before—rap.
Yes, I know, crazy, right? Most of you know me as a singer, but last night I decided to write a rap song, which is going to be the first original song i dropped on this community.
I thought about polishing it up and making it sound "perfect," but then I realized I loved it raw, just as it came to me.
The song is called Life Happens. It's inspired by some of the tough things I've seen happening around me recently. Sometimes life throws things at us, and it hurts, but in the end, it's just life happening.
In the chorus, I say, "I hope one day the sun will shine, I pray one day the sun will shine." That line hits deep for me because it's a reminder that, no matter what, brighter days are ahead.
This is me, stepping into something new, something scary, and I hope you guys feel the rawness and realness in it. It's not perfect, but that's okay because it's real. Hope you enjoy it 🩷🩷.
Here is the link to the beat I used from YouTube:
▶️ 3Speak
Yooooo @Babymoyin,
This week you took a risk jumping into the HIP HOP era, and I totally respect that.
We need more female emcees, and you will only get better with time if you keep practicing.
Although, I do judge rap originals and rap covers extremely hardly, more so than singing lol
I can't help it, I am equally hard on my own performances, if not more. But I just want to say that this cover was a profound song topic, I like the approach you took, blending it with your lovely singing voice on the chorus, the song theme concept was a deep and eye opening one on seeing people change over time and trying to reach them to bring them back to a place of spiritual and healthy stability, some go on that prodigal son and daughter path, never to actually return home, but all things are possible through Christ.
Your lyrics were thoughtful and connective, they told a story effectively, however some rhythmic patterns didn't fit well for the flow and the rhyme schemes could have been much stronger to structure the verse better.
Yes your song is real and that is what makes it effective and powerful, but I hope you aim to perfect this track later on so it is more impactful when you share it again in the future. Someone out there needs to hear the message in this track. Just imagine how it can change their perspective... I've had songs that have prevented people from committing suicide, so you never know who is truly listening to you in the moments that they need to hear good solid life advice.
Please work on your breathing control and delivery, but for your first try, your flow was for the most part fairly smooth and I did enjoy listening to you rap and the tonality you had. You definitely have some attributes, and don't let this be your ONLY hip hop entry.
I'll be looking forward to a variety of entries from you from now on since you are very talented and gifted, and you are challenging yourself once again, which is what a True Artist does, I hope you grow from my constructive criticism and you are adding layers and levels to your versatility, and you earned my recognition once again.
Just wait until we get to our collaboration one day. I am knocking a few out these upcoming weeks, so it'll be soon. :)
Wow thank you so much for taking your time to tell me what to improve on.
I don't know why I kept seeing it as challenge to do more and get better... Maybe it's because you made it sound like I have potential 😂😂
Thank you so much for the input. I will definitely work on it. Next one is definitely going to be perfect! To be honest, I didn't post this with the intention of "winning", it was just something close to my heart and I wanted to share .
Also about the rhyming. Will work on that too. Thank you so much once again.
You're very welcome
and as promised, here you go.
https://hive.blog/hive-140169/@verbal-d/vibes-judge-s-criteria-to-be-a-vibes-winner
OMG. Verbal-D you're the best! I know many people will find this super helpful. Thank youuu
Thank you so much. Glad I could finally get around to it and map it out. I will make some tweaks to it. When I get the time to clarify some things. But it is a pretty good insight
Oiii
Let me just say I absolutely loved how personal the lyrics of your rap is💖
And the flowwwww...It's always beautiful to see you try something new.
This is amazing and I wish you the best this week🥂 (p.s: the sun always does come out eventually💙)
Thank you my love. When are you dropping yours
Woow 😲 excellent friend you sing beautifully.
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Such a great performance, Weldon dear.
Thank youuu dear
Omg wow what a talent, you are awesome, and the lyrics are really god, that is a perfect entry, congrats
Thank you friend. And congratulations on your winn♥️♥️
Your lyrics are awesome and very easy to understand.
I'm not a good rapper, so I can't really say too much than I enjoyed you.
I read what @verbal-d typed and I believe those words of his will help you grow and become better.
I'm proud of you girll!!!
Nice flows girl... Hard to see female emcees these days let alone seeing ones that are this dope. Keep it up 👍👍
Wowww you called me an emceee. That means I must have done well because I actually don't rap.. I just tried... Thank you so much.
You're welcome. Well for a first time u nailed it. Can I get your WhatsApp number, there's something I want to discuss with you if you don't mind.
Oh well!
This is a lovely entry for week 20 Moyin.
I enjoyed listening to your entry, as always.
Jessica you're so lovely. Thank you mama