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RE: When The Tundra Calls / Remnants - Finish the Story Contest #58

in #finishthestory5 years ago

Gennadiy was feeling almost like an arctic Aladdin, if the cave of wonders had been a dump of frozen metal objects. That was the paradise of strange, rusty equipment and remnants of some obsolete alien technology.

This is such a great image to start the story with. I really had no trouble visualizing it in my head. The sense of play, characterizing the 'child character' was distinct.

I really enjoyed the banter, too. Children use foul language, and are generally terrible to each other, so reading it is fun. This felt realistic.

Also, bears are terrifying.

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I agree. You both created a credible and fun interaction between the two boys, that's a plus.

I have a lot of brothers and I grew up doing the worst things with a gang of peers, between cornfields and construction sites ... I still remember something, and when they talk to me about the innocence of children, I smile (unless innocence means lack of filters) ;)
I'm glad you enjoyed!