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RE: When The Tundra Calls / Remnants - Finish the Story Contest #58

in #finishthestory5 years ago

Obviously, the Aladdin simile was a little stroke of genius and an effective hook. I also loved the oxymoronic idea of an "obsolete alien technology". A fresh and entertaining entry with a lot of action, good dialogues, a twist and the final cliffhanger. What could I ask more? :-D

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I tend to resort to the similarities a little too often, but I wanted to keep it. I thought of a boy's eyes, how he could see a heap of objects and parts with an incomprehensible function, but with charm and value.

I'm glad you can't ask for more, but I DO ask myself more... next time! Ahahahah!