Read Part 1, Part 2, Part 3, Part 4
What happened so far:
After being forced out of his home, Tristan joined the android’s army under the threat of death to protect his sick sister. Despite his aversion to violence, Tristan is soon made the leader of the human part of the army, because in contrary to the androids, the humans can actually kill, which is important in their quest to overthrow the remaining oppressive government. Tristan, who doesn’t want his sister Joy to know about his new position, is forced to lie to her about it, as he becomes a more important part of the events.
Tristan felt like every sound he made in the darkness was a hundred times louder than it was supposed to be. The rustling of clothing, the sloshing of water. It all sounded like an army marching through the house.
”Tris? What are you doing?” Joy had woken up. But he would have needed to wake her up anyway.
”We’re leaving. I’ll help you get dressed in a moment. Just need to pack some food first.”
”What? Why? Are we already leaving for the attack? But it has been just five weeks since we came here! You can’t be possibly ready yet!”
The fear and worry in his sister’s voice were overwhelming. He tried to not look at her.
”No, we’re not leaving for the attack. We’re just leaving.”
”They allowed us to go?”
He didn’t answer that and instead finished packing. Then he helped Joy sit upright and put proper clothes on. Warm clothes. The desert was deadly cold during the night and without a house to shelter them, Joy might just freeze to death if she wasn’t properly prepared.
”Tristan, why are you not talking to me? What is happening?”
”I need you to be very, very quiet now, okay?”
He strapped the backpack on and lifted Joy up from her bed to carry her in his arms. She was slightly heavier than when they had arrived, but still almost as light as a feather. For a split-second, he wondered how much weight she could gain if they stayed. He wondered if she could become a healthy teenager in the android’s care. @suesa
Maybe she would. But there were too many dangers associated with staying. Too many lies he’d have to tell her. And he didn’t want that.
When Erin had told him the first time that the androids couldn’t kill humans as part of their programming, he had been skeptical. But Erin seemed to trust him after a short while and all the evidence pointed towards them telling the truth.
For a short period, staying and fighting the war with them had seemed like the right choice. Safety for his sister, salvation for humanity, all that stuff seemed to be so close. He had already dreamed of clean water, clean air, good food and happy people.
Then reality had caught up with him.
He had been trying to train those assigned to him, he had tried to teach them to handle a gun, tried to teach them to survive, tried to teach them how to kill.
Some succeeded. Most didn’t. And he couldn’t blame them.
Almost none of them was participating voluntarily, they had all been dragged here by the androids with the threat of death dangling over their heads. They believed that they would be killed for every transgression and that their family would be punished.
It might be possible to build an army motivated by fear, but that army would never be a good one when tested in battle.
That’s what Tristan had realized, and it was the reason for him to decide that it wasn’t worth it. He knew they’d fail. And this failure would mean Joy’s certain death. He preferred to try his luck, pack up Joy and flee back into the desert. Maybe they would find another community. Maybe they’d be able to survive alone. Either way, it had a better outlook than the certain death that would follow this war.
Sneaking out of the city wasn’t supposed to be easy, but Tristan had privileged information. He knew where the androids were patrolling, knew their exact locations at any time and at which moment he could slip away unseen. By trying to make him a loyal and important part of the whole endeavor, Erin had given him all the tools, all the power he needed to make a successful escape.
It was almost ironic.
Carrying Joy in his arms, Tristan moved as fast and silent as possible, slipping by the patrols unnoticed. Joy kept her head pressed against his chest and he could feel her breathing fast. She was afraid. He couldn’t let her know that he was too. Maybe even more than her.
The androids might have been programmed to be unable to kill humans, but Erin lacked that programming. And it was Erin whose trust he betrayed right this moments. He didn’t want to imagine what Erin would do to him if he was caught. He didn’t want to find out how a machine with emotions would react to betrayal.
They left the dim lights of the city behind and entered the almost absolute darkness of the desert. Thousands of stars were the only thing illuminating the night sky, as the moon was darkened by the earth’s shadow.
After an hour of walking in silence, Tristan finally stopped and carefully let Joy down on the ground. He was exhausted. Walking such a distance as fast as he had done, with the combined weight of his backpack and sister had taken its toll. Even his improved constitution from living in the city didn’t have a chance.
”Can you explain now, Tris?” Joy asked. ”I don’t understand why we had to leave. I thought we were safe? I thought you had become friends with the androids and that your shooting skills were improving. Why did we leave? What happened?”
Tristan sat down next to her and let out a long, deep, exhausted sigh.
”We weren’t safe. Maybe at the moment, but not in the long run. Participating in a war is never safe. You yourself urged me to become a better fighter so I wouldn’t die, I thought you understood the danger.”
”But that doesn’t mean we can just leave …” Joy obviously had some ethical problems to fight with. It wasn’t any different for Tristan. He had actually started to like Erin, at least to a degree.
”We had to. It was the only right choice.”
Suddenly, Joy’s expression changed from desperate and helpless to hateful and … evil.
”You ruined the plan”, she said with a voice that was only vaguely hers. ”We were so close to taking over their main android, everything would have been resolved and we would have been the only rulers of earth! But you dumb human had to ruin everything. We should have recruited you, not this puny child.”
”Joy, what the …”
Out of nowhere, Erin appeared and pushed a syringe into Joy’s neck. She immediately went limp. Tristan was to shocked to react to any of this as Erin stood over him with a sad look, shaking their head.
”We suspected that the remaining government would send a spy”, Erin said. ”I didn’t expect them to take over your sister. I’m not even entirely sure how they did it. I should punish you for abandoning us, but if you hadn’t done it, the thing that controls your sister might have been the death to all of us, so I’ll let it slide. Come, get up.”
Erin offered Tristan a hand and he grabbed it. The android lifted Joy’s lifeless body up and started walking back towards the city. Tristan followed.
What choice did he have?
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Very well written fiction story @suesa.
"Tristan felt like every sound he made in the darkness was a hundred times louder than it was supposed to be" -- love this line...really cool stuff here! would love to make some custom illustrations for your writing, if you're interested!
That sounds awesome! I once had an artist create a cover image for one of my stories to promote him a bit, if you want that too we can work something out! You can message me on steemit.chat or discord if you want, same name as here!
Sweet! I just made an account on discord the other day (I'm tninh#6415). What's your four digit tag? I couldn't find you
I think we need to be in a channel together. https://discord.gg/kmWRdJ join this and then look for me, my tag is Suesa#4095
I like Erin more with each part. I still consider it her. Referring to it/her as their could open further possibilities. Like she doesn't have only her own mind but also some of theirs. Maybe she can even influence people but not the other AI.
I'm talking about this http://www.dailymail.co.uk/sciencetech/article-4824484/Elon-Musk-s-27m-plan-plug-brain-computer.html
As Erin was built for perfect adaptation, their gender is up for interpretation and you can go ahead and say she :p
Excellent :)
Fear is a powerful motivator but it's not positive one...
This has activated my curiosity....Can't wait to know how all this happened in know time....
It's good that Erin and me, oh I meant Tristan are going to be even. So, I won't have to take pity on him for being good to me.
Another interesting episode. Good job @suesa.
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WHAT A NICE PIECE OF FICTION
Inzwischen könntest du ja schon ein Buch herausbringen :-)
Bin gespannt ob das mal der Fall sein wird!
so true!
I enjoyed reading it as always
This Tristan reminds me of a character in a Sci Fi movie I watched last night: The Alien Invasion. I could easily adapt this into a movie. Just say yes and I'd turn to a movie producer just for this :)
Great story! I really enjoyed it!
Well, I did not see that coming. How.. what? Why do I have the feeling Erin knew all along...
Can't be the leader of something like this and not at least have some idea about what's going on, right? :P
True, true. Helps to have a highly advanced AI as your mind, too.
so true. Really like this story
You caught me ! And in the night, I felt a pinch of anxiety when I read "Suddenly, Joy’s expression changed from desperate and helpless to hateful and … evil."
I didn’t expect that. I had to sit down to read again.
Always satisfying to hear my twists have the intended effect!
Hi Madam @suesa !
I am new to steemit and it is my First ever comment on your post.
Story of #three basic characters is fictitious but it made me to think there is someone like #Erin who is chasing me too. It is true i couldn't understand it fully and i would like to ask you something :
These lines confusing me on one side Tristan doesn't like Erin and on other side he is liking him to some degree, I am confused here.
Joy seems very innocent character at the same time very irony lady who dictates Tristan to somehow.
Actually this story is very interesting and building a taste of the readers in scientific way. I have been fond of novel reading and poetry that's why it is giving me deep meanings metaphorically in terms of societal parameters.
Appreciable job and worth reading blog. Keep posting and let us amuse with your supreme vocabulary and talent of story writing.
My Best Wishes and Support is always with you Madam.
very interesting post this time. I really enjoy @suesa
Yes, because you finished reading it 30 seconds after he published it :)
But you're correct, 30 seconds for the whole post is a bit fast
Auto reader :)
you mean the content is immediately uploaded into their brain? Neat.
The brain of such readers are photographic in nature. Just one glance and the whole contents are seamlessly transferred in their brains. Lol
Wow. Lol. Nice reply
Hey mam @suesa
Its very excellent post you sharing. I m new comer on steemit community and want to guide using of socialized steemit.
Running away ! Dystopia is nice article. Keep sharing it
WHat a great story board!!!! Upvote! Hugs to ya!
Harika
Wow amazing post.... carry on friend...
I like your post. Amazing story.
character of Tristan is my favourite,
keep writng
Wonderful story! I am very glad because of learning new stories through this platform I am very thankful to you@suesa and steem community.
very nice post. tnx @suesa
I think part: 6 is published immediately :)
Always interesting stories
Well done
Staying tuned for the rest of the stories
@tormiwah
What's the title of this fictional series?
"Dystopia" like it says in the title
I really like it :)
Empathetically true
Great story!
Empathetically true
Great story!
Writing a story is something I've wanted to do for a while but never really got to it. Reading your stories finally inspired me to try writing a story myself, and so I did! Thank you so much!
Good to hear :) I hope you enjoy writing as much as I do!
I've always had a hard time getting started with something, so I'm very happy I finally managed to come up with something. I really, really enjoy it!
great fiction, i'm doing one myself , it's called roses in a cactus, is there any rules writing fiction, coz i don't know any :)
I the only rules are: make it entertaining and keep it believable. And believable doesn't necessarily mean realistic, it just needs to be something that can actually work in the universe you created.
Thnks alot, I'll follow those tips and perhaps you can check my fiction and provide me with feedback and errors if found, thnks
Great story,I enjoyed the story plus your writing manner! :)
I try to write stories too,I am a novice though. Any advice will help me a lot :)
Love the story - will read back to the other parts and looks forward to reading the next episode.
Loved the raw reaction of Tristan in the end, when he's too shocked to react and is also looking for answers which he can only hope to find by following Erin. I run a literature blog as well. Check out my work, a comparison of Nolan's The Dark Knight series with Samuel Johnson’s poetry: https://steemit.com/writing/@vidishakhaitan/why-so-serious-johnson-london-vs-the-batman-trilogy
I'm really enjoying this series, trying to catch up to the current one but only found it today. Might need a bit more proofreading as there are a couple of spelling/grammatical mistakes but nothing to impact the story. Well done, love it.
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Great post there, keep up good work !
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