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RE: Terminal - [Short Story - Costa Concordia Shipwreck]

in #fiction7 years ago (edited)

I liked this very much! More than liked, I think I picked up some stuff I should add more of to my writing.

I could really see the concordia's massive body as Jason marveled at it, in part thanks to the comparisons with mountains and the mental image of a snowy array, heh.

That selfish girl could have at least told the officers she'd planted drugs in his baggage! At least to save him some explaining back there.

If anything, I think his reactions to what happened may have been a tad rushed, or perhaps simply too structured for such a shocking moment. That said, they're also pretty believable. Really well done!

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Thanks! Yea, the dialogue is a bit more truncated than I would have liked, but with the word count limit...you do what you can :)

Thanks much for reading!

Yeah, I've been there. The word count goes up and up and you're just beginning to get into the juicy bits. It's a struggle! But it's fine. I think this kind of story is more about the action, the mystery, the big reveal, and you did it nicely.

Super true. It's worse when you've written the whole thing and find you're like 400 words over, and then surgical cutting must begin. It's a slaughter of words.

Hahaha! Exactly my experience in the matter.