I think you should've gotten someone off of DeviantArt to draw a thumbnail for this instead of using a canned image (I'm guessing the "Druids" in this universe are Asian-looking), but other than the uninspiring thumbnail, the story works well. I like the way the characterization of the Druids as animals comes through in the narration and not just the dialogue. This kind of draws the reader into how this society thinks, and if we get something that's from Lucia's perspective later then it will make it that much more poignant.
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