The tiny hunter: a 50-word short story

in #fiction7 years ago (edited)

In case we haven't met, I'll share this one thing with you. I love 50-word short stories. My natural tendency is to write longer stories, anywhere from 1,000 to 6,000 words. But I have fallen in love with the 50-word short story as a way to capture the essence of a thing--a moment in time, an incident, or a magical scene.

short story contest. You're welcome to join!I'm currently running a #fiftywords

The tiny hunter

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(Image credit: werner22brigitte, Pixabay)

The old painter lives and breathes brushstrokes and birds. When he captures the tiny hunter, it is with russet, burnt umber, aquamarine and teal. Despite diminishing kingfisher numbers on the river near his home, this one will live forever-- perched on a tree limb, clutching bark and watching for fish.



Thank you for reading!

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Ultra well done, @jayna. Excellent word choices to make it more vibrant and full and feeling much longer. Word artistry to match that beautiful find of a painting.

Thank you very much, @negativer. I really appreciate your lovely comment!

Can you win your own contest. Nyce work, Jayna. Certainly one of the favourites from this round:)

Thank you for your lovely comment, @prydefoltz! Ha ha, no I am certainly not entering my own contest, but I couldn’t resist writing a story from the prompt! 😊

My mom is an artist and seriously, just the words "burnt umber" took me back to my childhood when she would paint on old barn boards. I ws always (for some weird reason) fascinated by the names of the colors on her paint tubes.

Wonderfully evocative writing... and in only 50 words? I'm amazed. You are awesome!

Thanks so much, @byn! I used to paint, long ago, and I always loved the names of the paints too. Thank you for reading the story, and for the lovely comment!

Ahhh, you used a dash to get to fifty words :P
For real though, I'm with Neg. This is crazy effective and is making me consider taking mine down lolz.

Oh my, did the dash give me an extra word? That was totally unintentional. I need to do a recount. At any rate it’s not like I will be disqualified. 😊

Don’t take yours down! I’m just about to read it a second time and upvote. But if you’re so inclined, you may make changes up to the deadline.

I’m so glad you decided to jump in!

I thought "What the heck," so yeah. I think I'm fine with it, but yours was just ugh. I keep forgetting how good you guys are at writing around here, like WOWZA.
I think yours is still at fifty. I counted it out of pure butt-ness.

No I had to edit it. I am absolutely devoted to making my 50 word stories exactly 50 words! I'm really glad you called my attention to that. And thank you for the very nice compliment.

You're welcome :D

I enjoy the 50 word format too!

Awesome! Do you write them?

I had at some point before. These days I pen down poems mostly.

I consider them (poems and 50-word stories) to be distant cousins. 😊

What a lovely word painting of the painter and his process

I'm with you @jayna and @byn about the paint tubes. My mom is an artist too. This leaves me both sad and hopeful somehow. Thanks for this provocative word-picture!

Thank you. I do hope we can make sure we preserve our environment and our wonderful wildlife!

That was very strong @jayna Great use of language, I especially liked "breathes brushstrokes and birds"

Thank you very much for your nice comment!

That's beautifully worded :-) New follower! :)

Thank you for the nice comment and the follow!

I love the poetry in this piece, very well done @jayna

Thank you, @cizzo! And I see you have written one. I’m so excited. I’m off to read that next.

Oh wow, this is perfection in miniature. The pitch-perfect choice of words, colours, such a delicate portrait. Love it.

Thank you very much for your kind words!

Its a great piece of art and a great painter who lives and breath brush-strokes!!! Winks

Impressive your story was exactly 50 words
How do i join in these contest and what is the reward?

Thank you! Just click the linked phrase in the post. It is all there—the rules and reward. I look forward to having you join!

thanks for your swift responds

Beautiful choice of words. You painted a story about a painter of birds. Lovely image too.

Thank you, @naquoya! I really appreciate your comment. It really is an amazing picture, isn't it?

I love the words you used. I feel they give me a very vivid picture. It would've been nice if I could've somehow ready the story first and then seen the picture. I bet my reaction would've been like, "Yes, that's what I saw in my mind!"

Thank you for your nice comment! Yes, I know what you mean. You can't know how much the image affects your appreciation of the words, and whether what you see when you read is somehow better or different than the image when they are presented in that order. I guess it's a little like seeing a movie based on a book before reading the book. It affects what you see in your mind's eye if you read the book after. Alas!

Hi, @jayna,

This is so beautifully done... I'm still smiling while penning you this note. :D

And I cannot believe that I had not (until just now) become a "follower" of yours? Must be getting old and senile...

Thanks for this beautiful description of a lovely painting of a truly amazing creature...

😄😇😄

@creatr

Thank you, @creatr. I appreciate the kind words and the follow. No worries! We were in touch and then life got busy. It’s great to reconnect!