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RE: Some diaphanous prerogative (original poetry)

in #dsound7 years ago (edited)

This is the one I was waiting for @d-pend. Always good to hear your voice. The markdown code you set up for the dsound link is brilliant. I really can't figure it out.

\The audio to this piece is/
\ Uploaded to @dsound /
\ At the links below /

/ ► Listen on DSound \

/ ► Listen from source (IPFS) \

OMG!!! OMG!!
The second stanza is a rap followed by a real jet plane not a sound effect!! If anyone did not listen to this poem go and do it now!!

This our noble expedition outward, repent,
Of a cushioned descent indigenous people
Inhabitants of the amber temple, purveyors
Of the divine & the simple, courtsey,
Bow:

This is the core of the message that starts in a rap. The message is clear to me and something I have been struggling with. We are only embryonic. Steemitschool and the poetry challenge, the whole steemit platform is still in infancy. It will be what we make it to be.

The only thing I was concerned about the poem was after the last line the flush of water kind of sounded more like a toilet flush. I wonder if this was intentional.