O Comet of Another's Dream
original poetry featuring the art of JanRobbe...with recitation on @dsound...
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[short update on the contest at the bottom!]
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O Comet of Another's Dream
I.
Someone else's history,
a subtle barrage of memories bygone
cometlike descent rescinds me
flayed by the haunting likeness
of their idealshpere.
personified fancies,
& a brazen button.
more than reflect
Psychic energy like the ground opened up:
Absorption abysmal – capturer of joy,
I am vacuumed through to
someone else's eyes of beguiling
desperation.
orbs strobing disillusionment & ecstasy
a land barren – wombful of prophets,
loom of accosting striations, here the
crunched edges are brigands, here the
smooth corners are speaking cadavers
O Ancestors!
O muse.
Lessening, or quickened,
The gnome intellect hermetical
With blasphemous momentum
Autonomously builds and unbuilds
Its capital cities.
II.
Empire of lustrous unbecoming—
You who fit to the pedestal
Some artifact uproarious with hellfire.
You who clenches the bristling falcon's roost,
Who agitates a pristine pond
Who executes abstruse decrees
Who maims the flush of youth's careless glee
Who laughs in disaster's wake
Who cries cruel fantasy through moonbeams
Who rages in the face of love
Who snuffs promise with
an acolyte's gown
Who turns away the agonized bride
Who wallows in despair's necrotic fluid
Whose plenitude of wile chokes the righteous
Whose pyramid of fire blinds the poor.
You, whose ætheric stone bends
the universe's gravity &
produces greatness & mediocrity
Inside a gourd of papyrus:
Who are you?
And whence came
The traces of universal essences
You trail barrage-like, O comet of dreams?
Written & spoken
By @d-pend
3/10/18
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Art by
JanRobbe
.1 — "Riverside"
2 — "Solace"
3 — "Ice Strength"
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Short update on 100 days challenge
Hi all! @d-pend here. First I want to apologize for my lack of formal updates for day 3 & 4. To be completely direct, I am way behind in my work on the challenge. I am currently building a team to help me manage everything. Most of my life I have been a person that tries to do everything myself. However, this undertaking is too big for one person! So I must express my apologies that I have not been able to run this challenge as well as I would like.
Here is a mini update to tide you over:
- Winners for days 2 and 3 are not yet announced. More information will come tomorrow.
- Maximum skip days in the 100 days is increased from 7 to 10. HOWEVER, If a contestant skips 3 days in a row, they will be disqualified.
- Poetry class is moved one hour earlier, now at 6 PM GMT (the same time days begin & end.) It lasts for 2 hours. The reason is so we do not go over into the next session as we have been.
- No official class tomorrow. I want to take a day and catch up on some things.
- First theme for Monday's class is the use of repetition. Second topic will be "inspiration/writer's block."
- I am reading many poems, but currently don't have the time to leave in depth feedback via comments. A huge shout out to all the participants that are helping in that area!!
- Massive gratitude, love & respect for all participants, as well as the curation team I am putting together. An emphatic and joyful thanks is also in order for the visionary founder of the Steemit school, generally amazing person and friend, @dobartim.
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Tomorrow I will come forth with a traditional, mega-update. Thanks for bearing with me. I'm doing the best that I can. :-)
Wholeness!
@d-pend
I only started following you two days ago, but within this short time, I can say that you are doing a good job towards the advancement of this platform. I have been following the proceedings of the Steemit school poetry contest and I can say that it is absolutely amazing. I visualize @d-pend occupying a position somewhere among the first 10 witnesses in future
Thank you very much @penking, we work together to achieve greatness :-)
Why do I feel you are talking to me ... lol. A guilty conscience, I guess. I should get over that. But indeed who is to be blamed or applauded for all this chaos and wonder, who indeed. Masterful write, Daniel:)
Hahaha! Thank you so much @prydefoltz :-) Been really enjoying your entries, even if I scarcely have the time to form my appreciations to the mould of a comment and release them, paper-plane-like, through the digital trade winds.
No worries ... I have been reading quite few myself. There is a lot to offer. You have your work cut out for you, Make sure you take time to recharge:)
I had a similar response. 😂 I do it all the time, paranoia yes and for me ego too. Then everytime this song starts to roll in my head, You're so vain, you probably think this song is about you...
https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=mQZmCJUSC6g
D - I can't imagine anyone needs an explanation from you about daily updates or keeping up with schedules. You are human, one person can't do all of this and it will take time to coordinate a team and then for every one to work cohesively. This is new, it's OK to take time to iron out the creases.
You are doing great.
I concur:)
I had to bring out my dictionary to understand most words you said. Great punch lines... at least I could learn new things before the end of today not just reading the poem but i learnt some English.. Go d-pend!!!!
Haha, well I am happy to expand your vocabulary @segunreus. I am guilty of using unusual terms, for sure. I applaud you for making an effort and am grateful you find my writing worthy of that time. Have a great day and thanks for the encouragement!!
You always welcome bro!
I often won't title my poetry, which I have been trying to remedy. This title is gorgeous, it really struck me. Today , like many days, I am thinking of all of the builds and un-builds and wondering if these cycle are infinite and so am I , how can I be so goddamn tired of it?
Thanks for the kind words and genuine comment @kilbride. I know what you mean about thinking that the life-weariness is a bit odd considering the actual dynamic of the cosmos.
In my opinion, well-crafted titles are VERY important, especially through the medium of Steemit. They are something like clickbait, lol. Obviously different types of titles appeal to different types of people so it's interesting to experiment with it.
A very beautiful love letter gives a wonderful appearance
Great article I made a good choice, my friend
I can only say you have started today with beautiful poetry, you are a great hard worker, I am truly amazed at your work thanks
Thank you so much for your message of appreciation @putry83 🙏 Have a wonderful day :-D
Hi @ d-pend its the first time i drop on one of your post and a wanna say it wont be the last time that i came and check your posts, i really this post. thanks very much
Hey @mcgrafite I'm happy you like it. Stop by any time.
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No komen.. you goood. ..
I prefer to listen/read your poetries just before going to bed, they make me much more comfortable :)
Hola. Que bien.
Me entusiasme demasiado leyendo tu poesía esoterica.
Muy buen trabajo.
Saludos
Hoy voy a dormir
Thanks a @dpend top and poetry from you, even if the translation I have very limited tp it didn't reduce my spirits.
I was steemitschoolpoetry participants who participated in the poetry challenge. I wanted to ask whether the 100 day poems sekolahsteemit Challenge is still in forward?
I don't see the announcement of the winner of the 2 day.
Thanks @ d-upper pend atensinya.
@nasrol thanks for reading! Challenge is still in effect, I am just very behind in everything. Day 2 and 3 winners have not been announced yet. Read my short update at end of post.
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@d-pend, you are simply terrific.
This piece has a gigantic imagery.
When I go to this point,
I paused for a moment and started asking myself (rhetorical) "what is @d-pend trying to accomplish in keeping me in suspense?"
This piece just made my day, bro.
You are poetry personified!
Hello @d-pend. I know it is quite challenging to make sure you pay attention to every detail of the poem. I'm not sure how I can be of further assistance to you, but you can ask me dear I'll help what I could. Also, I want to say thank you for hosting this Poetry 100 days challenge, you are making a history here, and helping a lot of talented people to share a piece of their art and heart through poem. I want to join, but I missed the 3 days in a row already, so I am disqualified. LOL. Just dropping by to say we support you and we win together. Thank you sir @d-pend. Have a great day. Take a little rest, you deserve it.
Good to hear from you, @d-pend. Nothing alive can be calculated and this Steemit poetry movement you’ve set in motion has a life of its own. Grateful to be part of it, writing, reading and learning as we go along. Wishing you best of luck in getting help you need to manage it.
Many thanks, to @dobartim & crew for all they do ✌🏼
Very nice content, Upvoted & always i will, follow me plz, thanks @d-pend
Great Job!
Keep It Up!
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wow you took all of us in a different universe with your poetry this was beautiful
my problem is in translation, because i am not good in using english.
when I translate my poetry in a 100 days poetry contest using google translate lots of inappropriate words.
there is sometimes a poem that looks Good so not Good because the translation is not appropriate.
comet of dream damn that was very nice to read interesting :)
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Woah, wombful of prophets, yet the land is barren. How do you even do it, to think these scenarios. The smooth corners are speaking cadavers , this blew my cap off, sniper standards :).
This has got to be your best output in four days, it's like you were on a persona vendetta to just kill it. Then the barrage of who's,
This part i could not stop reading. Whoever this villian in the poem is, he is worthy of a theatre adaptation. I hope you'll read this to us at the next poetry class.
And thanks again @d-pend for the good work you are doing. It's a mystery that you are able to put out such great poems even with the workload on you.
Such an awesome one,thanks a lot for sharing,following you.
You continue to amaze me @d-pend. I don't know how you find time to read 100 poems and still write the stuff you do. Hats off dude.
It's awesome that you are making a team on this because this is too much work for anyone. And i actually did not know that you have poetry classes.
I would like to know when is the next class, i want to learn to write poetry, because i don't have ideas of how to come up with it.
challenge has been going great bro wonderful you are leading from the front
Good one
I always waiting for your update.
Thanks for your many time to doing class. Im so happy to be a part of Steemit Discard School Channel.
Beautiful poem. I love the structure.
i think you will be a very weird person in reality..... Brilliant composition
I posted my daily challenge. This is my poetry. Day 4 with title The Connection Of Heart.
https://steemit.com/poetry/@anggreklestari/bilingual-poetry-the-connection-of-heart-day-4-100-days-of-poetry-challenge
Keep it up @anggreklestari :-)
Day 4 and I feel my energy already drained from me, but you still able to write this wonderfull stanzas.
Salute!
Hahah! you can do it! Your poems have been great @ayakasih :-)
Amazing. Day by day the participants to this challenge is increased. Hope always succeed.
Thanks for your poem and update @d-pend. Please take care of your health. One day it would be nice to show the code for how you pulled your text exactly in the poem. I see where this poem is coming from. Reading other's poems is an art in itself.
Hi @mineopoly thanks for your kind comment. I pull the text left and right using this tag:
which is a "non-breaking space." That is, it is empty space without going to the next line. @carmalain7 says he knows of other ways to to it (which I'd like to learn!) but this is the way I do it, generally. Many times you have to paste the formula twenty or thirty times to move the text a long distance!Thanks a lot @d-pend. You wonderfully answered my question. I will play with that tomorrow.