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in #contest7 years ago

Very nice peace brother! and If I hadn't have seen this I wouldn't necessarily have noticed that it was arranged into 11 line stanzas... very swish!

It's a great piece that saddens me because I think most of England are stuck in these shit jobs they hate, depressed, not realising that this isn't the way it has to be.

It's a well articulated reflection of modern day slavery - or at least that's what I took from it!

I really appreciate you participating and hope you had fun with it... winners to be announced!

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Hart Floe Poet

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Yeah. Not just from England. But almost everywhere. Sometimes people become a slave of time and social norms. And it saddens me. Aside from that, what Im trying to say in the poem are the following: (a) millenials being branded as the lazy generation, the misfits. Its kinda true, in some instances, which would explain the line "But earning". Suggesting that we know that we're irresponsible sometimes but we still do it anyway. (B) depression is like an epidemic in every country. Because of labels and social norms. Thats why most teenagers try to do stuff like drugs, cigarettes, sexing, drinking, social media, etc. (represented by the mirror). We are happy in the mirror. These are okay as long as we don't spend too much time inside the mirror. Because if we do, side effects might happen. This euphoria of sins are temporary though. So time will come that we will be vulnerable again to the harshness of the world. And we will come back to the mirror. Depressed. Busted.

If not limited by the number of characters, I might have included the death of the guy.