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RE: Cryptopia - Page #001 pencils!

in #art • 8 years ago

This page has instant appeal.

I am a comic artist new on Steemit and I think is cool what you've done so far with the designs and script work. On this page, I love your use simplified shapes for background elements and figures (something I should do more). Let me know if you are open to critiques because I do have couple of questions / potential improvements for flow and things that jump out at me. I am not a fan of critiques when the artist isn't looking for them. Either way great job!! Following you for sure, Steemit comic guys got to stick together.

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     8 years ago  

    Constructive criticism is most definitely welcomed @catapanoart! I just checked out your work! Incredible. Followed immediately.

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    Ok, I'll break down what I see, and maybe it will help. You have a great "Z" shaped read on the page overall which is awesome and you obviously did that purposefully. To help with that, you could do a couple of things.

    1. Maybe moving the right guy in the foreground lower in the panel to further help the eye flow would be helpful.
    2. Adding a foreground element in the bottom right like a rope fence or a wire or what ever to direct the eye toward the text bubble would help too.
    3. The perspective in the first panel is a little flat, especially with the main building. Bringing the right vanishing point closer to the panel will give you a less flat look. It almost looks like the building is super far a way like it was shot with a telephoto lens. That new perspective will also help add to your already sick composition.
    4. Lastly, you may want to add some shadows or render lines the coffin to, again, make it abundantly clear to the subconscious reader where the eye should go.

    Didn't think my explanation was good enough so I did this paint over.

    cryptoPaintOverSend.jpg

    These are all things that might help, but at the same time maybe you have reasons for it to be as is. Either way, awesome job, hope to see more pages soon.

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